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Money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. Government could better spend this money on other things to benifit the nation. to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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There is no valid reason to squander resources on
space
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researches
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research
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. I totally disagree with
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 view. Learning about
the
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outer
space
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 has broadened humankind's knowledge and led to many new technological achievements. Even in
21st
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 century, still many believe that resolving earth-related problems must be the
merely
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 motivation of scientists.
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 narrow-minded individuals have no idea as to the benefits of the
space
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 explorations. Owing to the
space
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-wanderer brilliant minds, we have obtained invaluable
informations
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information
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 about
space
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, and it is expected to continue. Take the black holes as an example. These distant and unique entities contributed to physics massively. Without
methiculous
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meticulous
 observations, we could not have updated our modern physics knowledge. Countless technological
device
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,
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, have been discovered
by
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 the help of
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 programs. Since these researches are carried out with cutting-edge technology, a surprise invention can be found anytime.
Microwave
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 oven,
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, was invented accidentally by American
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 researchers, or quantum computer, which is expected to be the dominant founding of
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humankind, is the result of advanced physics.
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,
space
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 works have never been only about planets or faraway stars. In conclusion, knowing about
space
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 has improved not only our knowledge but
also
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 our technology.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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