The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart depicts export assets from different
goods
in one nation during 2015 and 2016. The table illustrates information about the export value’s percentage comparison from 2015 and 2016.
Overall
, the first picture shows 5 products, and it is apparent that earnings from all products rose, except one which is gems and jewellery. The second graph
gives results
Verb problem
shows
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that every category increased, but the percentage of gems and jewels decreased. As is presented in the illustration earnings from petroleum lines
was
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were
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the highest
one
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apply
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in both years with just over 7
billion
dollars in 2015 and approximately 7.4 in 2016.
Also
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Also,
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most of
billions
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the billions
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came from engineered
goods
nearly 6
billion
in the first year, and after about 7.2
billion
. Meanwhile, when
country
Correct article usage
the country
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earned around 5.5
billion
in 2015, to 2016 it declined approximately by 2
billion
. In the fourth
proportion
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proportion,
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it has been
uplift
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an uplift
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in agricultural things earnings (from 4.1 to 4.2
billion
). In the
last
section billions from textiles surged
approximately
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by approximately
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six
billion
. The second pictorial shows that textiles changed to 15.24%.
Also
, engineered
goods
increased to 8.5%. When petroleum
goods
result rose to 3%, agricultural
goods
rose to 0.81%. Meanwhile,
gems
Correct article usage
the gems
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percentage reduced to 5.18%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • economic sector
  • percentage change
  • increment
  • decrement
  • fluctuation
  • trend analysis
  • year-on-year comparison
  • significant growth/decline
  • stagnation
  • market dynamics
  • fiscal repercussions
  • trade balance
  • competitive advantage
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