The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 2
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This
given
multiple chart illustrates the value of one country’s export earnings in various categories during 2015 and 2016.
Verb problem
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Overall
, there are five different types of products and their values. Also
, the percentage of rates in engineered goods,petroleum products,jewelry
,agriculture and textiles classifications. Change the spelling
jewellery
Although
petroleum and engineering were
increased, other sorts of products decreased over the period shown.
To be accurate, petrol and engine usage were higher in 2016 than one year ago. But, other ones increased but not too much. Unnecessary verb
apply
For example
: agriculture was almost in the same range and
gems too. Correct word choice
as
However
, textile has a much more important level between them for
15.24%. Change preposition
at
Nevertheless
, the fact that engineering and textiles both improved their grade to be higher in 2016 than in 2015.
All in all, we can see that this
country has overall
improved their quality and success in 2016, but not in 2015.Furthermore
, this
nation managed to gain more than 25% in this
year and gems and jewels had a lower rank between
other ones.Change preposition
than
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: The word "improved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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