The pie charts show how online shopping trends among 20- to 30- year-olds changed over a period of ten years in one region of the UK. Summarize the information by reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The pie charts compare how online shopping trends among 20-to 30 years olds changed over a period of
ten
years in one region of the UK, between 20017 and 2017.
Correct your spelling
10
Overall
, the clothing accounted for the highest percentage
. On the other
hand
the book Add a comma
hand,
was
accounted for the lowest Unnecessary verb
apply
percentage
.
Between 2007 and 2017, the
clothing went up 11%; Correct article usage
apply
Correct word choice
and electronic
electronic rise
14%; there Replace the word
electronics rose
was
many Change the verb form
were
changed
Replace the word
changes
for
food and drink at that time, was small Change preposition
in
increased
Replace the word
increase
5
%. The book went down 23%, there was a big Change preposition
of 5
decreased
. Music Replace the word
decrease
fall
7%, there was Wrong verb form
fell
small
Correct article usage
a small
increased
.
In summary, Replace the word
increase
the
clothing Correct article usage
apply
was
accounted for the highest Unnecessary verb
apply
percentage
and the
Correct article usage
apply
book
Fix the agreement mistake
books
was
accounted for the lowest Unnecessary verb
apply
percentage
.
In conclusion, nowadays the
young people buy online more Correct article usage
apply
tan
in the past.Correct your spelling
than
Submitted by debora.scott on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "trends" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
▼
Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+
Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!