"Environmental problems are becoming a global issue. Some people believe that individuals are responsible for solving environmental problems, while others think that it is the responsibility of governments and international organizations. Discuss both views and give your opinion."

No one can deny that
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environmental pollution
are
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one of the most concerning
matter
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in
this
modern era. It is
debatad
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debatable
among the
people
that
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who should take care of
such
issues whether the government, global
corporation
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corporations
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or communities. I think it is every individual's role to maintain a better world to live.
To begin
with, looking at the authority perspective. They should have the power to implement regulations
to
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the locals. When a law has been established, the
people
will follow
to
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avoid getting a penalty.
For instance
, increasing taxes on car
ownerships
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ownership
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help
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reducing
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emissions of carbon monoxide that lead to air pollution in the
long-term
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.
As a result
, there will be a limit on car usage and more
people
commuting
public
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transports
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transport
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such
as buses and trains.
In addition
, international organizations should promote awareness and education about the
significant
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of waste
managements
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management
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namely reduce, reuse and recycling.
For instance
, if a young age has explored
to
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this
level of sanitation, surely they will understand and develop a sense of responsibility in
the
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good ways, which will be beneficial to the earth.
On the other hand
, individuals play
a
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important role in maintaining the environment. When
people
have consciousness to preserve and appreciate the value of the world
then
it can save for the next generations to explore.
For instance
, conserving water utilisation or electricity reduction to prevent waste of resources and global warming. In conclusion, I believe that
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support from the upper class and
individuals
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individuals'
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role
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in maintaining, surely
can
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reduce the
environment
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environmental
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problems.
Therefore
, I think it is every
human-being
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human being
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responsibility to act.
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Grammar
The essay has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect readability. For example, 'the environmental pollution are' should be 'environmental pollution is' and 'debatad' should be 'debated.'
Supporting Details
The main points would benefit from further development and support. For example, the discussion on individuals conserving water and reducing electricity use could include more detailed explanations or additional examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the logical structure by ensuring each paragraph flows smoothly from one idea to the next. Transitional phrases or sentences could help here.
Grammar
Pronouns like 'they' should have a clear antecedent, as in 'if a young age has explored to this level of sanitation' which could be revised for clarity.
General
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame the discussion effectively.
Task Achievement
The essay covers both perspectives on the debate, showing an understanding of the prompt’s requirements.
Task Achievement
Specific examples, such as increasing taxes on car ownership and promoting waste management, help ground the essay in practical realities.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • global issue
  • cumulatively
  • significant impact
  • conserving water and energy
  • coordinated government policies
  • international agreements
  • climate change
  • deforestation
  • implement regulations
  • carbon emissions
  • incentives
  • renewable energy
  • systemic change
  • facilitate cooperation
  • global initiatives
  • holistic approach
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