"Environmental problems are becoming a global issue. Some people believe that individuals are responsible for solving environmental problems, while others think that it is the responsibility of governments and international organizations. Discuss both views and give your opinion."
No one can deny that
the
environmental pollution Correct article usage
apply
are
one of the most concerning Change the verb form
is
matter
in Change to a plural noun
matters
this
modern era. It is debatad
among the Correct your spelling
debatable
people
that
who should take care of Correct pronoun usage
apply
such
issues whether the government, global corporation
or communities. I think it is every individual's role to maintain a better world to live.
Fix the agreement mistake
corporations
To begin
with, looking at the authority perspective. They should have the power to implement regulations to
the locals. When a law has been established, the Change preposition
for
people
will follow to
avoid getting a penalty. Correct pronoun usage
it to
For instance
, increasing taxes on car ownerships
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ownership
help
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helps
reducing
emissions of carbon monoxide that lead to air pollution in the Wrong verb form
reduce
long-term
. Correct your spelling
long term
As a result
, there will be a limit on car usage and more people
commuting public
Change preposition
on public
transports
Fix the agreement mistake
transport
such
as buses and trains. In addition
, international organizations should promote awareness and education about the significant
of waste Replace the word
significance
managements
namely reduce, reuse and recycling. Fix the agreement mistake
management
For instance
, if a young age has explored to
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apply
this
level of sanitation, surely they will understand and develop a sense of responsibility in the
good ways, which will be beneficial to the earth.
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apply
On the other hand
, individuals play a
important role in maintaining the environment. When Change the article
an
people
have consciousness to preserve and appreciate the value of the world then
it can save for the next generations to explore. For instance
, conserving water utilisation or electricity reduction to prevent waste of resources and global warming.
In conclusion, I believe that with
support from the upper class and Change preposition
apply
individuals
Change noun form
individuals'
individual's
role
in maintaining, surely Fix the agreement mistake
roles
can
reduce the Verb problem
apply
environment
problems. Replace the word
environmental
Therefore
, I think it is every human-being
responsibility to act.Correct your spelling
human being
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Grammar
The essay has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect readability. For example, 'the environmental pollution are' should be 'environmental pollution is' and 'debatad' should be 'debated.'
Supporting Details
The main points would benefit from further development and support. For example, the discussion on individuals conserving water and reducing electricity use could include more detailed explanations or additional examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the logical structure by ensuring each paragraph flows smoothly from one idea to the next. Transitional phrases or sentences could help here.
Grammar
Pronouns like 'they' should have a clear antecedent, as in 'if a young age has explored to this level of sanitation' which could be revised for clarity.
General
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame the discussion effectively.
Task Achievement
The essay covers both perspectives on the debate, showing an understanding of the prompt’s requirements.
Task Achievement
Specific examples, such as increasing taxes on car ownership and promoting waste management, help ground the essay in practical realities.