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The pie chart shows the percentage of carbon dioxide (CO2) emitted by the 6 biggest polluters in 2015 while the bar graph shows the top 6 emitters per capita in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the percentage of carbon dioxide (CO2) emitted by the 6 biggest polluters in 2015 while the bar graph shows the top 6 emitters per capita in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie
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 depicts the percentage of carbon dioxide CO2 emitted by the 6 biggest polluters in 2015
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 the bar
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 shows the top 6 emitters per capita in the same year. It is clear from the pie
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 that the proportion of the rest of the world is higher significantly
however
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, China is
also
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 high and is nearly the same as the rest of the world,
on the other hand
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, the bar
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 of CO2 per person in Saudi Arabia rocketed to its peak.
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addition
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 there is a significant dip in Germany, India, Russia and Japan in the period time of 2015 .
To sum up
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, we could say there is a noticeable difference between the two charts.
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