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The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years . The graph shows the average number of meals eaten in fast - food restaurants and sit - down restaurants per family .

The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years . The graph shows the average number of meals eaten in fast - food restaurants and sit - down restaurants per family .
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The pie chart shows the
percentage
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 of a budget spent on
food
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such
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 as restaurant or home-cooked
meals
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while
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 the line graph shows the average number of families consuming fast
food
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 chains or sit-down restaurants.Based on the readings it is evident that the average budget for
meals
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 has exponentially increased over a period from 1970 to 2000 with 2000 being the highest.
Overall
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,the
percentage
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 of spending on restaurants tends to be higher or equal to home-cooked
meals
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 in 2000
on the other hand
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,the number of families preferring fast
food
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meals
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 skyrocketed from 20% to 100% respectively.
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,the rate of home-cooked
meals
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 from 1970 to 1980 followed by 1990 and 2000 are readily declining
moreover
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,there is a steady flow of restaurant
food
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 consumed from 1980 to 1990 and decreases in 2000 gradually. In conclusion,the number
percentage
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 of
food
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 spent on restaurant
meals
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 has increased from 1970 to 2000 and will overpower home-cooked
meals
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 over the years.
Whereas
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,in fast
food
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, the
percentage
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 of fast
food
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 consumption has increased over the years and overwhelms sit-down restaurants.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, food, meals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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