The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The diagram illustrates two sites where a new supermarket is to be built in the town of Garsldon which has a
population
of 65,000. It is evident from the layout that site S1 is located
on
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the countryside which is close to Hindon which has a
population
of 10,000. It is
also
in between
of
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the railway and the main roads which makes it accessible to
cransdon
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Cransdon
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which has a
population
of 29,000 but not to
bransdon
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Bransdon
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which has a
population
of 15,000. The terrain is
also
very close to Industrial areas and only reachable to one section of the people living in Garsldon. Site S2 is inside the town centre which is
also
a no-traffic zone
while
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It is entirely surrounded by industrial areas and is in the centre of the three nearby towns, It is
also
close to the main road and railways making it accessible to all the three towns.
This
site is
also
in the middle of the two housing areas making it more efficient for people to buy groceries in the town of Garsldon.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • map
  • town
  • supermarket
  • site
  • overview
  • possible
  • transportation
  • access
  • surrounding
  • facilities
  • population
  • density
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