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The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2915. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compar

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2915. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compar
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The bar chart gives information about the proportion of higher
education
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 rates by
women
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 in five different countries in the years 1980 and 2015.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that at the beginning of the period, the most participation of
women
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 in higher
education
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 was made by Australia,
while
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 South Korea participated with the lowest percentage.
At the end
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 of the period, the USA and Australia made up the highest number of
women
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 who continued to higher school , whilst South Korea became the least segment. In 1980, Australia accounted for more than half of the total
women
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 in higher
education
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 and remained stable in 2015. The figures for the USA and the UK showed a similar trend that started above one-third in 1980 and increased significantly to 55% and 59%, respectively.
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, France constituted 50% of the
women
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 who were going to higher
education
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 at the beginning of the period
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 and had a slight growth of 2% in 2015.
On the other hand
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, the smallest portion was allocated to South Korea less than 30% in both years.
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