The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people who consumed five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK over 8 years, which is from 2001 to 2008.

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people who consumed five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the

UK over 8 years, which is from 2001 to 2008.
The chart reveals the
percentage
of people consuming
sufficient
Correct article usage
a sufficient
show examples
amount of
vegetables
and
fruits
daily between 2001 and 2008. "Women" was the group with the highest
percentage
of people eating five
protions
Correct your spelling
portions
of
fruits
and
vegetables
, with the
percentage
rising from 20% to 35% from 2001 to 2006, followed by a gradual descent to 30% in 2008. Fewest percentages of children obtained a healthy diet among the other groups over the
8 year
Add a hyphen
8-year
show examples
period, with only around 12% of the group
ate
Wrong verb form
eating
show examples
sufficient
fruits
and
vegetables
regularly between 2001 and 2003,
alomst
Correct your spelling
almost
half the
percentage
of the group "women". After 2003, the
percentage
for
Change preposition
of
show examples
Children's increased and terminated at around 23%.
Overall
, the
porportion
Correct your spelling
proportion
of men having a diet of five
fruits
and
vegetables
daily demonstrated a gentle growth, from around 17% in 2001 to 25% in 2008, after reaching one-five in 2004.
Submitted by 788seal on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Add more linking words.
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, vegetables, fruits with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: