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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 1

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 1
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The depicted diagram illustrates the process of
electricity
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 generated in a hydroelectric
power
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 station.
Overall
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,
this
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power
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 station works with rivers and generates
electricity
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 that helps us to get more
power
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 from these elements.After these
actions
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 we will get hydroelectric electric
water
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power
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.
Also
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,
flow
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the flow
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 of
water
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 to generate
electricity
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 works both at night and daytime.
After
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this
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, they will generate the
water
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 and
then
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 reverse turbines with an operating generator at daylight, and at
the
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apply
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night time pumping
water
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 into
high level
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high-level
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 reservoirs. Looking at the picture in detail, these generators can generate
electricity
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 from the aqua scheme. All in all,
this
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 diagram shows
water
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power
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 more accurately than the other sources.
Furthermore
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, at night, the excess
water
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 is pumped back from the low-level reservoir to the high-level reservoir so that it can be reused, but
this
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 electrical
power
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 is generated in a dynamoelectric 
power
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 system.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, power, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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