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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 4

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 4
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The illustration below demonstrates the
process
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 of generating electricity in a hydroelectric power station.
Overall
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, it’s a man-made cyclical
process
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 containing
few
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a few
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 stages beginning with the
flow
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 of
water
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 to generate electricity
at
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during
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day
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the day
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. There is some equipment and only one resource, which is
water
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.
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, the whole
process
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occur
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 at the river, which transports
water
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 to a high-level reservoir.
Then
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 the
flow
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 of the
water
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 is
being
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apply
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controlled
with
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by
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 a dam that makes a special intake. It opens at daytime and closes at night. The
flow
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 of
water
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 comes to
power
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the power
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 station with
a
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apply
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reversible turbines that
also
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 work differently depending on the time of day.
At
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In
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the daytime
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daytime
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daytime,
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 it
operate
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operates
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generator
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a generator
the generator
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, and
as a
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result
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result,
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 the created electricity goes to power lines and enters the national grid. What about the night,
water
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of
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from
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low-level
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the low-level
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 reservoir is being pumped into
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the high
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high level
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high-level
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 reservoir. At night the
flow
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 of
water
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 during pumping is the opposite of the daylight ones. It makes the procedure cyclical
,
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apply
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 because
water
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 follows a certain cycle for a whole day.
Moreover
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it
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apply
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is
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its
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process
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 is environmental-friendly, and
that is
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 why it is so important.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, flow, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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