The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 4

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 4
The illustration below demonstrates the
process
of generating electricity in a hydroelectric power station.
Overall
, it’s a man-made cyclical
process
containing
few
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stages beginning with the
flow
of
water
to generate electricity
at
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day
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the day
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. There is some equipment and only one resource, which is
water
.
Firstly
, the whole
process
occur
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at the river, which transports
water
to a high-level reservoir.
Then
the
flow
of the
water
is
being
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controlled
with
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a dam that makes a special intake. It opens at daytime and closes at night. The
flow
of
water
comes to
power
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the power
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station with
a
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reversible turbines that
also
work differently depending on the time of day.
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the daytime
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daytime
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daytime,
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it
operate
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generator
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a generator
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, and
as a
result
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result,
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the created electricity goes to power lines and enters the national grid. What about the night,
water
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low-level
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the low-level
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reservoir is being pumped into
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the high
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high level
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reservoir. At night the
flow
of
water
during pumping is the opposite of the daylight ones. It makes the procedure cyclical
,
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because
water
follows a certain cycle for a whole day.
Moreover
it
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is
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its
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process
is environmental-friendly, and
that is
why it is so important.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words process, flow, water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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