IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

The chart and table show working hour and salary for 4 different occupationa. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart and table show working hour and salary for 4 different occupationa. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The data illustrates the number of
hours
Use synonyms
 worked per
week
Use synonyms
 and the annual salaries for four different
professions
Use synonyms
.
Overall
Linking Words
, nurses
work
Use synonyms
 significantly more
hours
Use synonyms
 than the other
professions
Use synonyms
,
while
Linking Words
 teachers
work
Use synonyms
 the least and earn the smallest income. Among the four
professions
Use synonyms
, fire service employees earn the highest
salary
Use synonyms
. Nurses
work
Use synonyms
 around 55
hours
Use synonyms
 per
week
Use synonyms
, which is approximately 20
hours
Use synonyms
 more than other
professions
Use synonyms
. Fire service employees
work
Use synonyms
 around 39
hours
Use synonyms
 per
week
Use synonyms
, and police officers
work
Use synonyms
 35
hours
Use synonyms
. Teachers,
on the other hand
Linking Words
,
work
Use synonyms
 the least, with 30
hours
Use synonyms
 per
week
Use synonyms
.
However
Linking Words
, the annual salaries do not directly reflect the
hours
Use synonyms
 worked. Nurses, despite working the longest
hours
Use synonyms
, earn the second-lowest income at $37,450 per year. Teachers, who
work
Use synonyms
 the fewest
hours
Use synonyms
, earn the smallest
salary
Use synonyms
.
In contrast
Linking Words
, fire service employees, who
work
Use synonyms
 fewer
hours
Use synonyms
, earn the highest
salary
Use synonyms
 at $52,050 annually, indicating that
salary
Use synonyms
 is influenced by factors beyond just
hours
Use synonyms
 worked.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, professions, work, salary with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Occupations
  • Salaries
  • Working hours
  • Average
  • Annual
  • Comparison
  • Discrepancies
  • Professions
  • Doctors
  • Teachers
  • Engineers
  • Retail workers
  • Balanced
  • High-paying
  • Low-paying
What to do next:
Look at other essays: