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The given line graph compares the proportion of domestic waste recycling in the UK, France and Germany from 2005 to 2015. Overall, the recycling rates in the UK and Germany increased over the period while it actually decreased in France

The given line graph compares the proportion of domestic waste recycling in the UK, France and Germany from 2005 to 2015. Overall, the recycling rates in the UK and Germany increased over the period while it actually decreased in France
The following graph depicts the proportion of domestic
waste
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recyled
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recycled
 in the
UK
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,
France
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 and
Germany
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 through the years 2005
till
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to
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 2015.
It is clear that
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at the end
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 of
2015
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2015,
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 the
UK
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 had the most
amount
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 of
waste
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recyled
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recycled
 followed by
Germany
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 and
France
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 respectively. In 2015,
France
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 had the most
amount
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 of
waste
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 recycled at 50% followed by the
UK
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 at 35% and
lastly
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 by
Germany
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 at 20%.
While
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Germany
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 and the
UK
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 showed steady growth till 2007,
France
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 showed a decline in the
amount
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 of
waste
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 recycled.
During
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From
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 2007
till
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to
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 2009, the
UK
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 showed no increase or decrease in the
amount
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 of
waste
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 recycled
while
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France
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 still declined. Out of the three countries mentioned,
France
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 showed a decline in the
amount
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 until 2013
where
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when
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 it showed a significant inclination towards the
amount
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 of
waste
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 recycled. In the end, the
UK
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 and
Germany
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 increased by 25 and 35 percentage points respectively
whereas
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France
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 decreased by 10 percentage points.
To conclude
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, all
the
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apply
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three countries have started to increase the
amounts
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amount
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 of
waste
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 recycled in 2015.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, uk, france, germany, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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