The diagrams below show two methods of using water to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Hydroelectric dam

The diagrams below show two methods of using water to produce electricity.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Hydroelectric dam
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The diagram gives information about the mechanism of hydroelectric power generation.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that there are eight stages to converting
water
becomes
electricity
. The process begins with evaporation which uses seawater as a main source and finishes with the distribution of
electricity
through underground cables to supply hospitals or schools power. Look at the diagram in more detail, First and foremost, seawater has been evaporated by the sun and turned into clouds that contain the
water
.
Subsequently
, the clouds move to some areas and the rain occurs gathering
water
to
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a dam as a reservoir. In
this
system, there is a pipe that transfers
water
from the dam through a valve (open and close) to a turbine that resulting a reaction which produces
electricity
.
While
electricity
comes up through high voltage cables, the
water
from a turbine is sent to the pump machine and is pumped back to the dam.
The next step is
electricity
that is
conducted from high voltage cables’ towers to the transformer station. From
this
point onwards, the undergone cables are set up through the areas to cover a wide range of amenities including residences, manufacturers, and hospitals or schools.
Finally
, the
electricity
is able to be used by people in those buildings.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, electricity with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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