The table shows average calorie intake in the United States over a period of time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table shows
average
Correct article usage
the average
calorie
intake
due to
a variety of food in the United States over a period of time. It is evident that the number of
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apply
calorie
intake
has increased with
the years.
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over
Firstly
, in the year 1970, the most amount
of calories
consumed where
through Meat, eggs and Nuts contributing 465 Correct your spelling
were
calories
to the total amount
of 2165 while
the least amount
of calories
were taken through fruits. Following that were grains
which contributed 430 calories
to the total amount
. Added Sugar and fat also
had a major contribution to the total amount
.
In 1990, The most
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the
amount
of calories
consumed were
575 by Correct subject-verb agreement
was
grains
out of the total 2405 calories
. While
grains
showed a significant increase in the calorie
intake
, the calorie
intake
of meat was
decreased in 1990. Other major contributors to the total Unnecessary verb
apply
amount
of calories
ingested were added sugar and fat which were increased by 45 and 50 calories
from 1970.
Lastly
, in 2010, The most amount
of calories
ingested were from added fats which showed a sudden increase when compared to 1990. Following added fats were grains
which contributed to 625 calories
out of the total 2665. While
the amount
of calories
ingested by fruits remained the same as they were in 1990, the calories
consumed through vegetables were decreased by 5 calories
.
To conclude
, the number of calories
have
increased each year starting from 2165 in 1970 and ending Change the verb form
has
2665
in 2010 Change preposition
at 2665
while
the amount
of Change the quantifier
number
calories
in added sugars and fats have
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has
also
shown a significant increase.Submitted by satyarthverma88 on
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