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The diagram shows the stages involved in the process of making leather goods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The diagram shows the stages involved in the process of making leather goods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The provided process illustrates the steps of producing stuff which is made
by
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of
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leather
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.
Overall
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,there are several stages for making goods
by
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with
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leather
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,initiating
from
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with
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 drying animal
skin
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 and finishing with selling
leather
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 products. First of all,the animal
skin
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 is dried which may take some hours.Afterwards,the dried skins are transported by a truck to the factory in order to be ready for manufacturing
leather
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 goods.
The next step is
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 that the animal
skin
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 is washed
by
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with
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 water and lime
in
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on
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 a plate.Once the animal
skin
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 has been washed,it is
then
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 soaked in the lime
in
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for
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 some hours.After that,the soaked
skin
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 is put in the press machine so as to be flatted.
The following step is
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 that a worker keeps the flatted
skin
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into
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in
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 the water which is mixed
by
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with
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 Tannin vegetable matter so that the pressed
skin
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 is soaked again for some time.Next,the soaked
skin
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 is polished by the factory equipment on the table.After the prepared
skin
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 is sent to the factory by a truck,the
leather
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 products are manufactured and sold to the shopps.
Finally
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,
leather
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 goods
such
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 as
purse
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purses
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 and shoes
is
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are
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 purchased by people in stores.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words leather, skin with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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