The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The presented charts in combination illustrate the percentages of workers in three different sectors which are agriculture, industry and services in four different countries and their differences in 1980 and 2010. A glance at the graphs reveals that the
sector
which sees the most workers employed is the industry in Germany,
USA
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the USA
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and Japan in both 1980 and 2010,
on the contrary
China
presents a higher number of employees in agriculture. As
it
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is observed in the graphs, the percentages of workers in the
sector
of industry increased roughly by 20% in Germany and
USA
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the USA
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and by 30% in Japan from 1980 to 2010.
However
, the percentage stood exactly at 40% in
China
.
On the other hand
, in
China
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China,
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it has
been
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registered a decrease because even if it remains constant that the
sector
with more employment is
the
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agriculture it has undergone a decline from 70% to 50%.
In addition
, in
China
also
the
sector
of service
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from 50% to 20%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sector, china with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • sector
  • distribution
  • dominance
  • decline
  • significant changes
  • employment
  • patterns
  • trends
  • global
  • compare
  • highlight
  • examine
  • identify
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