Food travels thousands of miles from producers to customers. Some people think that it would be better for the environment and economy if people only ate the local food produced by farmers. Advantages and disadvantages.

Losgistic
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Logistic
Logistics
of
food
normally takes up more than 50% of the
food
cost as
food
travels a long way from producers to customers if it is imported.
Therefore
, some people
sugggested
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suggested
that it would benefit the
environment
and economy if people only eat local
food
products
by
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local farmers. On the positive aspect, eating local
food
can help raise the income of local farmers and
therefore
, benefits the total national economy based on some empirical
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research done by scholars. The scholars
also
suggested that our
environment
is actually a mirco ecosystem and what comes from the soil will go back to the soil eventually.
Thus
, eating local
products
conserve
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the local
environment
in theory
while
consuming imported
food
products
would produce tons of
carbon
footprints and damage our
earth
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ecosystem.
On the other hand
, opponents suggested that despite producing
carbon
footprints, consuming imported
products
promote
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global trade business and
help
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improve international trading
relationship
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relationships
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. Trading has been seen as a type of cultural exchange since
the
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ancient
time
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times
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and
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is a very typical representation of it. At the same time, they provided some empirical evidence that consuming
food
from different attitudes allows the body to intake more various kinds of nutrients and
therefore
,
it
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help
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helps
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to reduce certain kinds of serious diseases
such
as heart diseases and cancers. For
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, Chinese people believe that eating mushrooms
from
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high
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attitude helps to lower blood pressure and eventually
lower
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the chance of heart disease in
human
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humans
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. In conclusion, some nutrients can only be found in certain types of
food
and those
food
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foods
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can only be imported. If we wish to balance body health, economy and
environment
,
importation
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of
food
should not be banned completely but
instead
, we can maintain it at a certain level
by
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taxation and laws. Regarding
environment
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the environment
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and
carbon
footprint, there are some new electrical transportation methods which can greatly reduce
carbon
emission
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emissions
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and
it
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also
lowers the cost of logistics at the same time.
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task achievement
The essay broadly addresses the task prompt and covers both advantages and disadvantages of eating local food. However, try to provide clearer and more detailed examples to support your points.
coherence cohesion
While the essay has a logical structure, some sentences could be organized more logically to enhance cohesion. For instance, you could present contrasting points in closer proximity for clearer comparison.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which provides a good structure for the reader.
task achievement
The essay presents a balanced view, addressing both the environmental/economic benefits of eating local food as well as the cultural and health benefits of imported food. This shows a thorough understanding of the topic.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • global warming
  • chemical preservatives
  • local economy
  • employment
  • reinstate
  • nutritious
  • public health outcomes
  • supply chains
  • political instability
  • natural disasters
  • pandemics
  • dietary diversity
  • economies of scale
  • seasonal availability
  • preserved foods
  • nutritional value
  • crop failures
  • food shortages
  • economic instability
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