IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories , from 1995-2002 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories , from 1995-2002 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
#minutes #billions #telephone #uk #three #categories #summarise #information #features #comparisons
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The bar graph compares the
minutes
Use synonyms
(in billions) of telephone calls
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
 three categories(Local, National and International, and
Mobiles
Replace the word
mobile
show examples
) from 1995 to 2002 in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
show examples
.
Overall
Linking Words
, local telephone calls exhibited the most gross
minutes
Use synonyms
.
Additionally
Linking Words
, national and
internation
Correct your spelling
international
 calls
as well as
Linking Words
 mobiles showed an upward trend between 1995 and 2002. It is noticeable that the local fixed line took a majority of total
minutes
Use synonyms
 in these 7 years. The figure
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
 the local calls started at over 70
billion
Use synonyms
minutes
Use synonyms
, increasing to 90
billion
Use synonyms
minutes
Use synonyms
 in 1999 before dwindling progressively back to 70% in the next three years. Mobiles (all calls) demonstrated
a
Change the article
the
show examples
 biggest change, rising by around 40
billion
Use synonyms
minutes
Use synonyms
 in 7 years. In detail, it was only under 5
billion
Use synonyms
minutes
Use synonyms
 in 1995,
however
Linking Words
, climbed significantly to 45
billion
Use synonyms
minutes
Use synonyms
 in 2002.
In addition
Linking Words
, National and International
also
Linking Words
 increased steadily, from nearly 35
billion
Use synonyms
minutes
Use synonyms
 in 1995 to 60
billion
Use synonyms
minutes
Use synonyms
 in 2001,
then
Linking Words
 remained a similar number in 2002.
Submitted by xeyojnn on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, billion with synonyms.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
What to do next:
Look at other essays: