You stayed in a rental apartment during your trip last year and were generally satisfied with it. However, there was one issue that you encountered. You are planning another trip and would like to rent the same apartment again. Write a letter to the owner. In your letter: · Express your interest in renting the apartment again. · Mention the problem you faced during your last stay. · Provide details about your upcoming trip and ask about the availability of the apartment.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

this

letter to inform you about my plan to rent your C125 apartment at Bris Arena - 17.

Although

last

trip was almost satisfactory, I remember an issue which should be resolved. Because of the amenities available and the safety factor,

this

time again my grandparents and I are interested in renting it. We have some medical appointments for dental checkups and our stay would be for ten days. As I mentioned above, I experienced an issue with the faulty working of the fridge.

This

is because the refrigerator was consistently tripping and did not give proper cooling so I had faced a problem storing my medicines and ointments.

Therefore

, having thought of the medical condition of my grandparents, could you please sort the problem out at the earliest

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Lastly

, I would like to give a short description of our next trip which is probably from the 11th to the 21st of next month. I hope after checking these dates, an intimation will be sent to me about the availability of the apartment. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Jacob Brown

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Your greeting and closing are appropriately formal and polite.

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You have addressed all parts of the task effectively.

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The tone of the letter is suitable for a formal inquiry.

The Greeting

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Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

191 words

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