Nowadays good good governance and healthy politics have become a fabled phenomenon and people, particularly the youth, have lost their trust and interest in politics and public affairs. Whom do you blame for this attitudinal change? How do you think people's trust in politics and interest in public affairs can be restored?

In the recent era, the young generation
have
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lost their faith in
politics
and public affairs
due to
the diminishing of fair governance and healthy
politics
.
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essay will discuss who is to blame for
this
kind of change and what steps should be taken to restore the belief of
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public in
politics
and public interests.
To begin
with, the political atmosphere of
modern
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world consists of a government run by
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greedy and corrupt politicians.
Therefore
, it is hard to believe
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a political entity,
who
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is in charge
for
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public affairs and interests will
work
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their fellow citizens because
this
does not reflect on their actions.
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of the political groups
work
hard to win the elections once their term comes to an end. No effective steps are taken to eradicate every
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and the general public is left with incomplete and fake promises.
Due to
these
factors
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the youth tends to lose their faith when it comes to governance and
politics
. For councils in Asian states which consisted of political leaders who were charged for corruption, published a survey regarding the voting results, where around 87% of the youth did not
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their vote during elections.
However
, despite these
challenges
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the government should step in with some strict laws to impose on politicians who are involved in malpractices and dirty
politics
. Strengthening the mainstream
media
can
also
be effective
upto
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up to
a certain extent. In the past it has been seen that political parties do not involve themselves in corruption and malpractices if their performance is
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with their prior promises and
media
houses provide
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update
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with any
parsiality
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partiality
to the general public. A prime example of
this
scenario can considered from a study published by the University of Arizona, stating that
leader
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leaders
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of
a
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countries who have a strong mainstream
media
work
more efficiently compared to those nations who lack
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number of strong
media
houses. In conclusion, the trust of youth can be regained in public
affair
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if more qualified and dedicated leaders take charge of the government, ma
additionally
the mainstream
media
can
also
play an important role
to criticize
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in criticizing
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the policies and
work
of the political groups.
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