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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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The line chart presents the ratio of
exports
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 of Australian goods with 4 major countries from 1990 to 2012.
Overall
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, Australia had the highest percentage of
exports
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 with China. They had the lowest business with India.
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, with US did a good amount of
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 in the initial years but with the passage of time, the percentage decreased. In 1990 the percentage of exported products with China was below 5% and it remained the same till 2000.
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, in 2001 there was a rapid growth in
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 and till 2012 the
exports
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 were around 30% which was the highest amount of
exports
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 compared to other countries.
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, in the initial
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 Australia had a little more than 25% of
exports
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 with Japan but it decreased with the timeline.
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, the
exports
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 with India did not grow much and remained below 10% and they did not have the highest ratio of
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 with India.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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