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You recently saw an advertisement in a newspaper seeking volunteers to do unpaid work with local children. You are interested in this work. Write a letter to the head of the organization. In your letter – express your interest – ask for details of the work that needs to be done – let them know when you are available.

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I hope you are doing well . I am writing
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 letter to express my keen interest in volunteering work with local children . Volunteering has always been an important aspect of my life, as
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 believe in giving back to
community
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the community
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 and making positive differences in the lives of children. I would like to know about the nature of the work that needs to be done.
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, I am
intersted
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interested
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in knowing
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 about the types of
activites
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activities
. which age group of children are there? Is there any specific skill or education required for
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 volunteer work ? I am
artist
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an artist
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 by profession . I am available to volunteer in the evening and on
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, please let me know if these times
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align
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organization
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 needs. Feel free to tell me the available time so I can manage by myself . I eagerly look forward to hearing from you. yours faithfully, x.y.z

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task achievement
Your letter accomplishes the task effectively by addressing all points mentioned in the prompt. However, you might want to provide a bit more specific detail regarding your availability or your related skills to give a more thorough response.
coherence cohesion
Try to ensure that all your sentences are complete and connected. For instance, 'Specially, I am intersted to know about the types of activites. which age group of children are there?' can be connected better.
task achievement
Your interest and intentions are clearly communicated, and the letter is very polite and appropriate for the context.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriate and well-executed.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph has a distinct focus, which helps in clearly conveying your message.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • keen interest
  • volunteering
  • positive difference
  • request more details
  • types of activities
  • age groups
  • specific skills
  • qualifications
  • available
  • align with
  • organization's needs
  • flexible
  • accommodate the requirements
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