The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different variables are measured in percentages

The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different variables are measured in percentages
The line graph illustrates the birth
rate
, population growth
rate
and it was dead
rate
between 1940 and 2020 in Scotland. There
had
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were
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three types
variables
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of variables
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which were measured g in percentages.
Overall
. it can be seen that demographic trends declined,
it
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and it
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started to point that was highest the birth
rate
.
while
population growth
rate
trends fluctuate. Looking at the line in detail, the birth
rate
started at amount 2.5 per
cent
in 1940, it declined to approximately1.9 per
cent
in 1945. After that, it increased slowly to about 2.2 per
cent
in 1950.
Next,
it diminished dramatically
at
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1.0 in 1961. Once it raised to approximately 1.3 per
cent
.
Finally
, it decreased slowly until the end period to just under 1.0 per
cent
in 2020.
Moreover
, the death
rate
began at amount 1,5
then
it dropped dramatically to just under 0.5 per
cent
. After that, it turned down slowly to just under 0.5 per
cent
until in 2010. The
last
, it increased by about 0.9 per
cent
at the end
periods in 2020. Regarding the line graph in the fluctuation,
population
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the population
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growth
rate
opened at an amount of 0,8 per
cent
in 1940, it declined to 0.5 per
cent
in 1945. After that, it decreased sharply to about 1. 5 per
cent
. And
then
, it went down sharply until the end period at zero in 2001.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.

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