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The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the number of power production and usage in the first 10 nations in the year 2014. It can be grouped into outstanding and non-outstanding
group
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.
Overall
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, having generated and consumed the most
electricity
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, China led in both production and consumption at around 5,300
billion
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kWh
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.
Conversely
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, it can be seen that Korea displayed the lowest levels of both
electricity
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 generation and consumption at roughly 450
billion
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kWh
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.
To begin
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 with,
electricity
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 demand and supply in China and the US exceeded 3,500
billion
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kWh
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. Having generated and utilized approximately 4,000
billion
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kWh
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 of
electricity
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, the United States surpassed the third-ranking nation by three times. Moving to the remaining countries, it is witnessed that their
electricity
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 output and intake were below 1,100
billion
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kWh
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. Despite
this
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, it is noticeable that power generation in all countries outweighed the electric usage, apart from Germany.
Furthermore
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,
in
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Russia saw
the
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 comparable amount of
electricity
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 utilisation and creation.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hour (MWh)
  • capacity
  • output
  • distribution
  • consumption
  • production
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable energy
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • trend
  • pattern
  • discrepancy
  • regional
  • anomaly
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