Your manager is going ot leave your company next month. You and a colleague want to give your manager a leaving present. Write a letter ot this colleague. In your letter say how you feel about your manager leaving describe a possible present for your manager suggest arrangements for buying the present

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope

this

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email finds you well. I am writing

this

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message in order to plan a simple present for our

manger

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manager

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before he leaves

working

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work

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in our company. To be honest, I feel very sad about his

desicion

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decision

. He is

such

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a great

manger

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manager

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, who was helping us

became

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become

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a better worker each day. I almost consider him as one of my friends.

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, for sure we will miss him so much. For the present, I

suggests

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buying him a new laptop for his new job. He said to me yesterday that his laptop is no longer working, and that's why I think it would be a great

supreise

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surprise

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to that, my brother who

is working

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works

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in an

electronic

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electronics

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store, knows a lot about different

type

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types

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of devices, and I think he could advise us in buying the gift.

Therefore

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, I will contact

with

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apply

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him for help. And we will make

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apply

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arrangements for the present. If you need any details please contact me by email. Kind regards, Nouf Mut,

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task achievement

Include specific examples of your manager's positive impact to provide more context.

coherence cohesion

Avoid minor spelling mistakes like 'desicion' instead of 'decision'.

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The tone of the letter is friendly and collaborative, which is suitable for the context.

coherence cohesion

The letter has a clear introduction, body, and closing, which helps in logical structuring.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

6.5

Logical structure

6.5

Single idea per paragraph

7.5

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

177 words

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