Your manager is going ot leave your company next month. You and a colleague want to give your manager a leaving present. Write a letter ot this colleague. In your letter say how you feel about your manager leaving  describe a possible present for your manager suggest arrangements for buying the present

Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
this
email finds you well. I am writing
this
message in order to plan a simple present for our
manger
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manager
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before he leaves
working
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work
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in our company. To be honest, I feel very sad about his
desicion
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decision
. He is
such
a great
manger
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manager
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, who was helping us
became
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a better worker each day. I almost consider him as one of my friends.
Therefore
, for sure we will miss him so much. For the present, I
suggests
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buying him a new laptop for his new job. He said to me yesterday that his laptop is no longer working, and that's why I think it would be a great
supreise
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surprise
.
In addition
to that, my brother who
is working
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works
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in an
electronic
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electronics
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store, knows a lot about different
type
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types
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of devices, and I think he could advise us in buying the gift.
Therefore
, I will contact
with
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him for help. And we will make
an
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apply
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arrangements for the present.  If you need any details please contact me by email. Kind regards, Nouf Mut,
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task achievement
Include specific examples of your manager's positive impact to provide more context.
coherence cohesion
Avoid minor spelling mistakes like 'desicion' instead of 'decision'.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and collaborative, which is suitable for the context.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear introduction, body, and closing, which helps in logical structuring.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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