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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
In the
graph
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 we can see the three main fuels used in the UK between 1981 and 2000 measured in energy
units
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. In 1981 the most
ammount
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amount
 of
petroleum
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 fuel
is
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was
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moset
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most
 used at around 90 energy
units
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, it is closely followed by coal at 80
units
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, white natural gas usage is half of that, ar 40
units
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. In the years to follow we can see a rapid rising
of
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petroleum
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 usage reaching its peak of 140
points
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 in 1984,
while
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 coal
achives
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archives
achieves
 close to an
all time
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 low in the same year at around 38 energy
units
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 finding its way back up to around 60
points
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 in 1986. Another significant change is the drastic drop
of
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petroleum
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 production in 1990 reaching 100
points
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, around the same time natural gas
starts
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started
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 to steadily
raise
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rise
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 until the year 2000 reaching 100
points
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petroleum
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 being at an
all time
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 high and coal slowly declining to around 30
points
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Vocabulary: Replace the words units, petroleum, points with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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