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the chart below information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 208. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main fetures, and make comparison where relavant.

the chart below information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 208. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main fetures, and make comparison where relavant.
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illustrate
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 data about the percentage distribution of weekly revenue to 8 different categories in families between 1968 and 2018.
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, more money was
initially
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 spent on food than any other groups, but it was outnumbered by expenses on leisure.
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,
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 families started to spend more on housing, transport and leisure, others witnessed
downward
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 trend. Looking at the details, spending on food comprised 35%, after which it decreased by half in 2018. In the first year, fuel and power formed approximately 6%, and
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 it decreased to
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slightly less than 5% in 2018. A similar pattern can be seen in
clothing
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the clothing
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 and personal goods category,
they
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 accounted for about 10% and 8%;
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, the percentage of
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 experienced
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a decrease
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decrease
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 to nearly 5% and 4%.
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, the expense of family earnings on household goods remained unchanged at roughly 7%. The index for housing was as high as for clothing, before increasing almost by 10%.
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 similar upward trend saw transport and leisure categories, they contributed roughly 8%, they went up reaching 15% and 23% respectively.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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