Task 1 The diagram details the process by which carbonated drinks are produced. Summarise the information by selecting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.

Task 1 The diagram details the process by which carbonated drinks are produced. Summarise the information by selecting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.
The illustration depicts how carbonated drinks are manufactured.
Overall
, it is a complex process which involves five essential stages.
First,
the raw
water
is treated in the
water
-cleaning plant.
Which it
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is passed from the filters to a chamber where
water
softener and chemicals are added to it and pumped to the electric heaters where
stage
two begins. In
stage
2,
water
is treated on the principle of evaporation and carbonation. The purified
water
is heated in electric heaters and the stem produced from the process is transferred through a cooling pipe to a chamber where carbon dioxide is infused into it. The carbonated
water
flows from the long pipe for the mixing
stage
.
This
stage
includes a mixing tank which continuously rotates anti-clockwise. Colourings, syrups and flavours are mixed with carbonated
water
and drinks are ready for the next step but prior to that they are again filtered. The filtered carbonated drinks are filled into two mediums,
that is
bottles and cans, both are packed in cartons which get shipped to the supermarkets.
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