The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegatables per day in the UK from 2001 and 2008

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The chart represents the statistics

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consumption

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the consumption

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of fruits and

vegettables

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vegetables

women

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men

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and

children

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from

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the year

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year

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years

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2001 to 2008. It is evident that

men

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consumed

maximum

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a maximum

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number of

portion

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portions

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in 2006 ,

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consumed

maximum

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the maximum

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in 2008 and

children

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in 2007.

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, in the category of

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men

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there is

slight

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increase every

year

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from 2001 to 2007.

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, there is

minor

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dip in 2008 by 2%.

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women

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women's

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and

children

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percentage

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percentages

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also

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increased moderately every

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and

sink

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seen in the

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2008 approximately about 2-3% in both of them. From 2001 to 2003, the portion consumed by

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reamined

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remained

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, the colossal amount is consumed by

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in all the years compared to

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and

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second number in eating vegetables and fruits and

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remains

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the

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men, children, year with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

135 words

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegatables per day in the UK from 2001 and 2008

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Robot and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in the workplace. Why is this happening? Do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society?

The cost of flight has decreased significantly over the last decade. This has made overseas travel much more accessible. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.