The table below shows employment patterns for males and females in New Zealand in 1993 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows employment patterns for males and females in New Zealand in

 1993 and 2003.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
The table depicts the employment patterns for men and women in four different sectors in New Zealand in the
year
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2004 and 2003.
overall
, the
difficultiesin
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difficulties in
difficulties
finding
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skilled and unskilled workers were nighest in 2004.
whereas
, the
diffeulties
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difficulties
in finding
techineal
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technical
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and managerial
andmanageria
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management
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workers
worlers
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workers
were lowest in 2004.In the year 2003,
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the difficulties
thedifficulties
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the difficulties
in finding S/Cilled
worlers
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workers
in all the sectors
manufactring
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manufacturing
, building commerce, and service)
weve
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we've
below 50%,
wnich
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which
increased to 501. (from 45% only in
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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sector n 2004.
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