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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates global
water
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consumption
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 across three sectors—agriculture, industrial, and domestic—over the period from 1900 to 2000. The table provides specific data on
water
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 usage per person in
Brazil
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 and the Democratic Republic of Congo (DRC) as of 2000.
Overall
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,
while
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water
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consumption
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 increased in all sectors, agriculture consistently had the highest usage worldwide.
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,
water
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consumption
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 per capita in
Brazil
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 was significantly higher than in the DRC, primarily
due to
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Brazil
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's larger population and extensive irrigated land. In 1900, agricultural
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 use was approximately 500 Km³,
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 industrial and domestic
consumption
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 was negligible, each at less than 1,000 Km³. Between 1900 and 1950, there was a gradual increase in
water
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 usage across all sectors.
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, from 1950 onwards,
water
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consumption
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 rose sharply, particularly in agriculture, which reached around 3,000 Km³ by the year 2000, remaining the largest consumer throughout the century. Turning to the table,
Brazil
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, with a population of 176 million and 26,500 Km² of irrigated land, had a per capita
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consumption
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 of 359 m³ in 2000.
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, the DRC, with a population of only 5.2 million and 100 Km² of irrigated land, had a significantly lower per capita
water
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consumption
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 of just 8 m³.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, consumption, brazil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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