You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart
serves
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provides
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information about the percentage of women who
go
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went
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to higher education in five
various
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apply
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countries between
years
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the years
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1980 and 2015.
Overall
, in each
country
, the total amount of women going
into
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to
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university was
increase
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increased
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. But, only
Australia
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in Australia
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that the
percentation
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presentation
was
same
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the same
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in
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at
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different times. First of all, the United Kingdom in 1985 had
percentage
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a percentage
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at 35 per
cent
.
Then
, significantly increased
until
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to
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55 per
cent
in 2015.
Move to another
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Another
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state, the United States of America
also
have
a
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the
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same phenomenon.
Initially
, in 1985 the percentage
just
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was just
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around 38 per
cent
. A little bit higher than the UK. In 2015, sharply up by 20 per
cent
which was 58 per
cent
. In South Korea itself, the
country
begin
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began
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with 15 per
cent
in 1985.
Then
,
succesfully
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successfully
upwards to 30 per
cent
.
Next,
in France, the difference is not too far. In 1985, the state started with a great number, 50 per
cent
.
Subsequently
, in 2015 the
country
had only 53 per
cent
. The
last
country
, Australia has
same
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the same
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percentation
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percentage
which was stagnant at 58 per
cent
.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words country, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • higher education
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • significant
  • comparison
  • identify
  • highest
  • lowest
  • contextual
  • global
  • relevant
  • constant
  • substantial
  • fluctuation
  • proportional
  • data
  • evaluate
  • analyze
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