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You are studying for a qualification, and you would like some off work to complete it. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - ask for some time off to complete a qualification. - Suggest what you will do later at work if you have time off. - Say how the qualification helps your job or company.

#qualification #work #manager #time #job #company
Dear Mr. Benjamin I am writing
this
 letter to request
for
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a special time off period for the testing
qualification
 class next week. As you already
known
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, I am working on progress to complete the expert testing
qualification
 class for the
last
 3 months. By the end of next Friday, September 6th, there will be a final examination for
qualification
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 degree and I would like to request
for
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your approval to take 2 days off by Thursday and Friday in order to fully prepare for the test. I have checked with our team on the current schedule and we
are
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 not
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 any urgent
task
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 for the next week.
Also
 upon returning after the day off period, I can catch up with the team on current work and finish our project by the middle of the month. Please note that
this
qualification
 is very important to me because it is one of the required
policy
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 of our company to
finished
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 the course by the end of the
years
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 and it is
also
 a point in my current KPIs list. I am looking forward
for
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 your approval. Best regards, Binh
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coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence and cohesion, consider breaking down complex sentences and improving paragraph transitions for smoother flow.
task achievement
Ensure accuracy in terms of dates and formalities. For example, use correct prepositions and articles ('testing qualification class next week' could be 'a testing qualification class next week').
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a polite and respectful tone, which is appropriate for a formal request to a manager.
complete response
Key points such as the reason for the request, the plan for managing work, and the importance of the qualification were clearly addressed.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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