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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The graphic illustrates the rates of illiteracy shown by women and men
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 several regions in a year.  It was clearly shown that most people in South Asia are not being able to read or write, regardless of
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gender.
In contrast
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 to that, developed countries idly sat at the lowest place. Based on
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this
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 findings, we can conclude that most
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 of
Asia
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the Asia
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 continent, specifically in the south and west side, do not have the basic skill of reading and writing at all.
Secondly
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, if we're focusing on the basis of
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gender, specifically in the top illiterate countries, women are found to be the majority to be more illiterate than men. The figure exhibits almost double
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 comparing them.
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, we can conclude specifically Asian women might
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not have the highest
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skill
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 as they do not have the basic skill of being literate.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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