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The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar charts illustrate the proportion of workers who worked in three industries between 1980 and 2010 in four countries.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the graphs that the total number of workers working in
China
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 was in the top position in both years in agricultural produce and
Germany
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 was the highest in industry.
In addition
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, the
services
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 of three countries
Germany
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, the United States of America, and
China
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 were the same in the initial year after that
Germany
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 attained a higher position in the
services
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 sector in the final year. It is conspicuous that in 1980,
China
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’s people worked 70% in agriculture and
Germany
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 was the lowest about 5% in the same year.
Additionally
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, the second highest number of employees engaged in industries
such
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 as manufactured goods and
China
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 had fewer workers working in the same industry.
Moreover
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, the
services
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 sector of nations
Germany
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, the United States of America, and
China
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 were 50% and only Japan’s employees were nearly 40% in 1980. Probing ahead, in 2010,
china
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’s people were 50% remained the highest among the other states in agriculture but it increased from 70% to 50% and
Germany
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 experienced a dramatic increment attained to slightly more than 80% as compared to Japan, which was marginally less than 80% and
China
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’s growth was only 40%.
Furthermore
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, the
services
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 sector declined during these thirty years ,
Germany
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 plunged to 40% was the highest and
China
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 showed a downward trajectory to 20% in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, germany, services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • sector
  • distribution
  • dominance
  • decline
  • significant changes
  • employment
  • patterns
  • trends
  • global
  • compare
  • highlight
  • examine
  • identify
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