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The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features.

The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features.
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The given table illustrates the proportion of people in two
areas
 who engaged in four leisure activities which
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 reading, animated play, playing and photography for the years 1990 and 2010.
Overall
, there are no significant changes, but it is noticeable that in 2010 the number of participants increased in almost every section. Despite the difference of 20 years, there are particular groups that decreased or did not change.
To begin
 with,
according to
 the data in 1990 urban and rural
areas
 mostly took
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part in a reading activity, which is 61% and 71%, respectively. In second place in popularity and quantity was animated play, the percentage of rural
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 26 and urban 21. Only 18% and 10% of village and city locals participated in animated play, respectively. The lowest percentage from all of the groups is photography, which is 14% of countryside residents and 10% of town people. Turning to 2010, portions of
reading
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 category in city and village
areas
enhanced
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 17% and 7%, respectively, which in both cases is 78%.
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 that took second place by quantity in 1990 has not increased, the percentage of
agricultural
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the agricultural
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 region is still 26 and municipal area is 14%, which is 7% less than
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 was before.
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the proportion of the group that calls an "animated game" has not changed in the city, which is still 10%, and in
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the countyside
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countyside
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countryside
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 it has decreased by 4%, which is now 14%.
Nevertheless
, the category called "photography" has grown
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 10% in both
areas
, which is 24% and 17% in rural and urban, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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