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You recently made reservations for dinner at a very famous and expensive restaurant in town. However, the meal and the service were terrible. The restaurant manager was not available to solve the problem, so you left without a resolution. - state what problems you had with the food you ordered - complain about the service - describe how you want the restaurant to resolve the problem

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I am Joyce Araujo, I visited your restaurant
last
 night and I
got
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 a terrible experience. Even when I
did
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made
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 my booking 5 days ahead, my table was not ready on time since my booking was supposed to be at 7pm, but
at
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 the
end
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 your staff assigned me at 8pm. Regarding the food, being a Michelin
start
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star
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 I expected fantastic food, but my dish came overcooked and my
husband's
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 got
a
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the
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 wrong order,
a
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apply
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pasta
instead
 of
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soup.
Also
, the waiting time was over an hour, a very
disapointing
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disappointing
 experience.
Furthermore
, the awful service continued with the waiter, he was very rude and had zero
emphaty
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empathy
 with our matter.
Thus
, I tried to address my
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 with the manager without any resolution
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 the end since he was busy and
innattentive
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inattentive
 with us. Bearing in mind that
this
 is a recognized restaurant, I would like to request a refund
due to
 the terrible meal and experience provided by the staff. I hope you consider my request because
this
 is a restaurant that I really like. Sincerely,  Joyce Araujo
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task achievement
Try to expand on your points with more specific details or examples. For example, describe the taste of the overcooked dish or how the incorrect order affected your dining experience.
coherence cohesion
Organize your points in a more logical sequence. Perhaps group the complaints about food and service separately for better flow.
coherence cohesion
Include a stronger closing statement summarizing your overall dissatisfaction and expectation from the restaurant.
task achievement
You clearly stated the problems with the food and service, which is essential for task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Your essay had a clear structure with an introduction and conclusion, which helps in coherence and cohesion.

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