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Practice 1: You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to the course tutor. In your letter, •describe the situation •explain why you cannot continue at this time •say what action you would like to take You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any ad

#practice #minutes #job #course #tutor #•describe #situation #•explain #time #•say #action #ad
Dear Mr Smith: My name is Marco Dimonaco and I am writing to you in
regards
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regard
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at
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to
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 the course that
i
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I
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 am doing at Cambridge
institute
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Institute
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 in Perth.
This
 course named Busnisses and Manager
is running
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 every
week day
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weekday
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 from 4PM to 6PM. As you may noticed, in the
last
 days
i
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I
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 could not
assist to
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attend
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 the class because my job is getting more and more busy.
As a result
, my boss
increase
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 the amount of hours in my schedule.
Which
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This
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 means, that
i
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I
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 cannot
asisst
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assist
 to the class at five in the afternoon. I used to
managed
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 to assist
to
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with
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 my work and the class but
i
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I
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 can not handle
anymore
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it anymore
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. I am
physical
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physically
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 tired and
also
 mentally too. I would like to ask you if you can give me the opportunity to
enroll
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enrol
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 in the next course during September. If is not
that
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apply
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possible, what is your advice about
this
 kind of
situations
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situation
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? I would like to say
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that
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than
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thank
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 you in advanced I look forward to hearing from you
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 sincerely Marco
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coherence cohesion
Use paragraphs to structure your letter more clearly. Each bullet point should ideally form its own paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Ensure correct punctuation and capitalization (e.g., 'i' should be 'I').
task achievement
Expand on your reasons for not being able to continue the course and specify any details about the courses you would prefer if you resume later.
task achievement
Be cautious with spelling and grammar, and ensure all sentences are complete and correctly punctuated.
task achievement
The letter addresses all the key points requested in the prompt: describing the situation, explaining why you cannot continue, and suggesting a course of action.
task achievement
Respectful and polite tone is maintained throughout the letter, adhering to a formal writing style.
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