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In today's very competitive world, a worker has to possess multiple skills to succeed. Among the skills that a worker should possess, which skill do you think is more important, social skills or good qualifications? Explain the reason and provide specific examples to support your answer.

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Introduction
In
this
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 essay, I will examine what
skills
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must have
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apply
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a good worker, who
want
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wants
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 to advance in
him
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his
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 career and obtain
better
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a better
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 position in
company
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the company
a company
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.
Generally
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Generally,
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 we can
saparate
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separate
 social
skills
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 and qualifications that are relevant aspects to
became
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becoming
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 a perfect worker, in my
opinion
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opinion,
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 social abilities are more important than
competences
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competencies
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.
Body paragraph 1
In curriculum vitae, degrees, masters,
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 language certificates and past experiences, compound qualifications, are the principal
subjets
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subjects
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however
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 relation
skills
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 are very important to make
complete
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a complete
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job-profile
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job profile
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.
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Better preparation is the most important characteristic for companies because a dependent who can
dimostrate knownledge
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demonstrate knowledge
 about products to clients gives to company better credibility and buyers are more interested so he can improve sales or in another aspect when he has to realise a
produt
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product
 not alone he can explain better what everybody must do.
Body paragraph 3
However
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, social
skills
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 let
work
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us work
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 in
armony
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harmony
 and achieve results quickly, so
also
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this
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 is so searched by
company
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companies
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, because in the majority
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of enterprices
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enterprices
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enterprises
 must work in a group to realise
project
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the project
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,
moreover
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, social abilities in
sales
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the sales
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 sector
is
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are
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 relevant, thanks
its
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it's
it is
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 we can convince
a clients
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clients
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 to buy somethings.
Conclusion
In
conclution
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conclusion
, good
relationship
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relationships
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 and
competences
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competencies
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 are necessary to advance
career
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a career
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, but social
skills
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 create
work
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a work
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envoilment
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environment
 to grow in a correct way, and I hope that will be the first requirement by companies in
next
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the next
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years
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few years
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, work on maintaining a clear and consistent flow of ideas. Ensure that each paragraph has a distinct point and that all paragraphs work together to support your thesis.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by ensuring that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Use linking words and phrases to guide the reader through your argument.
task achievement
For task achievement, make sure you fully develop your main points with relevant examples and explanations. Try to provide more detailed and specific examples to illustrate your arguments better.
task achievement
Enhance your essay by making your ideas clearer and more comprehensive. Elaborate on the importance of social skills and qualifications with more in-depth analysis and examples.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, which gives the essay a clear beginning and end.
task achievement
The essay addresses the task by discussing both social skills and qualifications, which are the key aspects of the question.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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