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First impressions are important. Some people think that doing well in interviews is the key to securing a good job. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, everyone dreams of getting an excellent job or career. Some hold the view that a good first impression and doing well during an interview will lead to success in being selected.
However
, I can't entirely agree with that vision. I believe that an excellent CV and work experience are major rules for success, and I will discuss both views. Some individuals,
such
 as females, usually concentrate on their outfit presentation and appearance and do not prioritise working on different elements.
For instance
, some feminine celebrities,
such
 as USA actors, appeal to most job interviews with expensive brand outfits and full makeup without well-organised preparation for the interviews,
On the other hand
, some females believe that working hard to enhance their CVs and academic certificates is the main aim and priority
due to
 their high competency in all sectors.
For example
, Chinese females depend not only on their educational and experimental performances but
also
 on their appearance. In conclusion,
due to
 all the above-mentioned factors, the government and society should concentrate on individual hard work and long experience in the field rather than the interviewer's external first impression.
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The essay addresses the task by discussing both the importance of first impressions and other factors like CV and work experience.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • First impressions
  • Interviews
  • Securing
  • Communication
  • Preparation
  • Research
  • Performance
  • Qualifications
  • Confidence
  • Body language
  • Networking
  • Recommendations
  • Follow-up
  • Technology
  • Social media
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