The chart below gives information on the percentage of Canadians who gave money to charitable organisations by age range for the years 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The chart below gives information on the percentage of Canadians who gave money to charitable organisations by age range for the years 2000 and 2015. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words
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The bar chart above shows information about the percentage of Canada's
citizen
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citizens
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who donate their money to charitable organisations from various ages between
years
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the years
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2000 and 2015.
Overall
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, the category of
age
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range from 18 to 49, the charity was high in 2000. But, from
age
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50 until 65 and over, the charity was high in 2015.
Firstly
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, in 2000, people from
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age
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the age
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group 18 to 24 donated their money up to 20 per
cent
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.
However
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, the number decreased to 11 per
cent
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in 2015.
Then
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, in 2000,
people
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the people
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who
give
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gave
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their money
for
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to
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charity
was
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were
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around 29 per
cent
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.
Nonetheless
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, the
per
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percentage
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cent
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was
become
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apply
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lower to 25 per
cent
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in 2015. After that, from
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age
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the age
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category 35 to 49, in 2000, the
per
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percentage
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cent
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was really high among other categories, which was 39 per
cent
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.
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, the per
cent
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steadily down to 34 per
cent
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. Even so, there are two types of
age
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range that the trend was
increase
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increased
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. The first one is ages from 50 to 64, in 2000, the
per centage
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percentage
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was only 34 per
cent
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.
Then
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, constantly up to 38 per
cent
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.
Last
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category,
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age
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the age
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group from 65 and beyond, in 2000, the
per centage
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percentage
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was 31 per
cent
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. Afterwards, slightly upwards to 34 per
cent
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • age range
  • charitable organisations
  • fluctuates
  • notable changes
  • participation
  • considerable decrease
  • contrast
  • consistent increase
  • middle age groups
  • peak
  • notable drop
  • shift
  • financial priorities
  • economic circumstances
  • demographic
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