The bar chart show the number of male and female students doing scientific research across a range of disciplines at a UK university in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart show the number of male and female students doing scientific research across a range of disciplines at a UK university in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The graph demonstrates the
quantity
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number
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of pupils based on gender who are doing scientific research on different subjects at a UK university in the year 2009.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
number
of male students outweighed the
female
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females
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in all the fields except
the
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veterinary
medicine
. Both of them were highly interested in Biology making it the subject with
highest
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the highest
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participants
whereas
women
in physics were very few and so were
men
in veterinary
medicine
. Biology had the highest
number
of male researchers
of
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about 230 with 200 other
women
participants .
Beside
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it,
Medicine
and Physics were
another
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other
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popular fields involving almost 200 and 220
men
respectively.
However
, it was veterinary
medicine
along with
the
medicine
for
women
with nearly 170 and 70 lesser to that respectively. Astronomy, Geology and veterinary
medicine
attracted very
less
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number
of
the
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students, the former two had an equal
number
of
boy
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boys
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of
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approximately 150 and only about 70 were enrolled in the latter. In comparison ,
women
did not want to research physics as much as
men
and apparently 40 of them only showed their interest.
Furthermore
, a little higher by about 10 and 20 were in Astronomy and Geology respectively and they outnumbered
men
in veterinary
medicine
by roughly 30.
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