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The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph compares the percentages of the three categories that citizens in the UK spent money by each age
group
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 in 2004.
Overall
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, the percentage of Food and Drink increased in accordance with age,
in contrast
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, the amount of the
Restaurant
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Restaurants
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 and Hotel marked the highest figure in the youngest
group
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.
It is clear that
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 Food and Drink’s figures were increasingly enlarged from around 5% in the
group
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 under 30
years
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 old to over 20% in the oldest
group
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.
Similarly
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, Entertainment’s percentages were developed by over 20% in the
group
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 61-75
years
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, before experiencing a significant decreasing figure in the over 76
years
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group
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.
On the other hand
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, the highest expense for the category of Restaurant and Hotel is observed in the youngest
group
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, nearly 15%. The subsequent two groups maintained their percentages of
this
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 category around 12 to 13%, despite diminished figures from the under 30
years
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group
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.
However
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, in the 61-75
years
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group
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,
this
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 category dropped dramatically,
while
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 it showed a growth of over 5% in the oldest
group
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words group, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Expenditure
  • Categories
  • Age groups
  • Residents
  • Summarize
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Spending habits
  • Life stages
  • Childcare costs
  • Healthcare costs
  • Outliers
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Cultural factors
  • Leisure activities
  • Financial outlays
  • Demographics
  • Percentage
  • Allocation of funds
  • Consumption
  • Discretionary spending
  • Essential expenses
  • Generational differences
  • Income bracket
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