Improvement in health, education, science and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations however the government or richer nations should take responsibility for helping the poor nations. Do you agree or disagree?
Over the
last
years
, several debates Correct quantifier usage
few years
has
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have
open
the issue Wrong verb form
opened
on
how to solve the social and economic conditions of the Change preposition
of
so called
"third-world" Add a hyphen
so-called
countries
and one opinion has driven the focus on how the improvement in health, education, science and trade should be under the responsability
of the richer Correct your spelling
responsibility
countries
. This
essay agree
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agrees
on
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with
this
opinion revolving around two reasons: the current health of the "first-world" countries
is due to
500 years of a colonial past and ecological and social justice.
Countries
in America and Europe count on high level
of health, education and science and Fix the agreement mistake
levels
for
this
reason
lead the world economies. Add a comma
reason,
However
, the roots of such
life quality has
been reached thanks to their colonial past. For more than 500 years American and European Change the verb form
have
countries
took advanteges
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advantage
advantages
by
the exctraction of resources and non-paid labour from the African Change preposition
of
countries
both granted to increase production, science
and Correct word choice
and science
therefore
expand the
trade. The "Correct article usage
apply
Scrumble
for Africa" is still an open wound that has not yet been properly repaired. For Correct your spelling
Scramble
this
reasons
, Fix the agreement mistake
reason
mouvemnts
like "Black Lives Matter" Correct your spelling
movements
along with
BIPOC intellectuals are opening the debate towards the possibility of establishing helping systems as a way to reckoning with a past that is
not over.
The second reason is related to the concept of democracy. European and American countries
are
democratic constitutions, one of the Verb problem
have
goal
of a democratic state is a fairer world. Democratic Change to a plural noun
goals
counties
should establish policies oriented to Correct your spelling
countries
a
social and ecological justice through economic policies that don't reproduce submissive Remove the article
apply
relationship
. It is known that the World Bank, with the end of slavery and colonial Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
relationship
, introduced policies for the help of African Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
countries
. However
such
instruments were often just a continuation of a colonial past imposing high rate
debts and Add a hyphen
high-rate
therefore
the impossibility to get
out from any kind of autonomy from the same colonial Change preposition
of getting
countries
.
In conclusion, while
often it seems that healthier countries
have worked harder to reach that standard and that have already offered help to poorer countries
with no results it is crucial to deepen the way how they reached such
conditions and how in the past they have assisted those countries
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