Improvement in health, education, science and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations however the government or richer nations should take responsibility for helping the poor nations. Do you agree or disagree?

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last
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, several debates
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open
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the issue
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how to solve the social and economic conditions of the
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"third-world"
countries
and one opinion has driven the focus on how the improvement in health, education, science and trade should be under the
responsability
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responsibility
of the richer
countries
.
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on
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this
opinion revolving around two reasons: the current health of the "first-world"
countries
is
due to
500 years of a colonial past and ecological and social justice.
Countries
in America and Europe count on high
level
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of health, education and science and
for
this
reason
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lead the world economies.
However
, the roots of
such
life quality
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been reached thanks to their colonial past. For more than 500 years American and European
countries
took
advanteges
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the exctraction of resources and non-paid labour from the African
countries
both granted to increase production,
science
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and
therefore
expand
the
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trade. The "
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for Africa" is still an open wound that has not yet been properly repaired. For
this
reasons
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,
mouvemnts
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movements
like "Black Lives Matter"
along with
BIPOC intellectuals are opening the debate towards the possibility of establishing helping systems as a way to reckoning with a past
that is
not over. The second reason is related to the concept of democracy. European and American
countries
are
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democratic constitutions, one of the
goal
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of a democratic state is a fairer world. Democratic
counties
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countries
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should establish policies oriented to
a
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social and ecological justice through economic policies that don't reproduce submissive
relationship
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relationships
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. It is known that the World Bank, with the end of slavery and colonial
relationship
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, introduced policies for the help of African
countries
.
However
such
instruments were often just a continuation of a colonial past imposing
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debts and
therefore
the impossibility
to get
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out from any kind of autonomy from the same colonial
countries
. In conclusion,
while
often it seems that healthier
countries
have worked harder to reach that standard and that have already offered help to poorer
countries
with no results it is crucial to deepen the way how they reached
such
conditions and how in the past they have assisted those
countries
.
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