The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The data is shown as a bar
chart
which illustrates
total
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number
minutes
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of minutes
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of telephone calls
in
particular
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a particular
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country,
dividing
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divided
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into three categories in
8 year
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span. Generally speaking, calls
done
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made
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from
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by
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mobiles
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mobile
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and national & international showed
overall
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an overall
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upward trend,
whereas
local calls
shows
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showed
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fluctuation from 1995 to 2002. As
chart
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the chart
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shows,
mobiles
remained
least
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at least
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one
amongst
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among
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all of them
in
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apply
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every year.
Conversely
, Local calls stood as the most used
one
. On the
one
hand
,
mobiles
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mobile
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and national and international calls showed
increasing
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an increasing
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trend. Usage of
mobiles
rose exponentially;
however
, national and international calls climbed up more steadily.
On the other
hand
,
chart
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the chart
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depicted
growth
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the growth
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of local
call
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calls
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from 72
billions
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billion
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to 90
millions
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million
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in
years
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the years
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1995-1999. After that, it plummeted until
initial
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the initial
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standpoint, which is approximately 72
billions
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billion
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. On the
one
hand
,
mobiles
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mobile
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and national and international calls showed
increasing
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an increasing
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trend. Usage of
mobiles
rose exponentially;
however
, national and international calls climbed up more steadily.
On the other
hand
,
chart
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the chart
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depicted
growth
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the growth
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of local
call
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calls
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from 72
billions
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billion
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to 90
millions
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million
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in
years
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the years
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1995-1999. After that, it plummeted until
initial
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the initial
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standpoint, which is approximately 72
billions
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billion
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, on the other hand".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, mobiles, one, hand, billions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "depicted" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "plummeted" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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