The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The data is shown as a bar
chart
which illustrates total
number Correct article usage
the total
minutes
of telephone calls Change preposition
of minutes
in
particular
country, Add an article
a particular
dividing
into three categories in Wrong verb form
divided
8 year
span.
Generally speaking, calls Add a hyphen
8-year
done
Verb problem
made
from
Change preposition
by
mobiles
and national & international showed Fix the agreement mistake
mobile
overall
upward trend, Add an article
an overall
whereas
local calls shows
fluctuation from 1995 to 2002. As Wrong verb form
showed
chart
shows, Add an article
the chart
mobiles
remained least
Change preposition
at least
one
amongst
all of them Change preposition
among
in
every year. Change preposition
apply
Conversely
, Local calls stood as the most used one
.
On the one
hand
, mobiles
and national and international calls showed Fix the agreement mistake
mobile
increasing
trend. Usage of Add an article
an increasing
mobiles
rose exponentially; however
, national and international calls climbed up more steadily.
On the other
hand
, chart
depicted Correct article usage
the chart
growth
of local Add an article
the growth
call
from 72 Fix the agreement mistake
calls
billions
to 90 Change to singular
billion
millions
in Change to singular
million
years
1995-1999. After that, it plummeted until Correct article usage
the years
initial
standpoint, which is approximately 72 Correct article usage
the initial
billions
.
On the Change to singular
billion
one
hand
, mobiles
and national and international calls showed Fix the agreement mistake
mobile
increasing
trend. Usage of Add an article
an increasing
mobiles
rose exponentially; however
, national and international calls climbed up more steadily.
On the other
hand
, chart
depicted Correct article usage
the chart
growth
of local Add an article
the growth
call
from 72 Fix the agreement mistake
calls
billions
to 90 Change to singular
billion
millions
in Change to singular
million
years
1995-1999. After that, it plummeted until Correct article usage
the years
initial
standpoint, which is approximately 72 Correct article usage
the initial
billions
.Change to singular
billion
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, mobiles, one, hand, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "depicted" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "plummeted" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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