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The given bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age group who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevent.

The given bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age group who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevent.
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The chart illustrates the ratio of different genders and ages who did regular physical exercises in Australia in 2010.
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, it is obvious that females in the
age
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 group of 25-65 and over were more active than the males.
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, the
most
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 difference between their
activity
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 was observed in the 35-44
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 group, meanwhile difference was felt the least among men and women who were 65 and above. Men demonstrated the maximum of regular physical exercises in the period of time between 15 and 24 years, which constituted 52.8%.
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, it is just a bit below the best performance that women aged 45-54 showed, being 53.3%.
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, the minimum of
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 chart was seen in performance by the males of
age
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 group 35-44.
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, the contrast
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between the
 2 gender's
activity
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 could be
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 seen the most, particularly, in the
age
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 of 35-44.
In contrast
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, the percentage of men's physical
activity
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 experienced a downward trend as they got older,
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 women's
activity
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 increased over the ages.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, activity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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