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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of global Sales
in
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 four types of digital
game
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games
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 from 2000 to 2006.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that global sales in handheld
games
 showed the highest proportion in all
period
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;
whereas
, online
games
 were seen the lowest over the seven years. Observing the chart in more detail, handheld
games
 had the largest amount with about 17
billions
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billion
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. Console
games
was
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 the second in 2005 accounting for around 6
billions
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billion
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. Followed by
conside
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apply
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games
 and online
games
 accounting for almost 5
billions
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billion
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 and 3
billions
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billion
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 respectively.
In contrast
, the lowest figure was in 2001 approximately 1
billions
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billion
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. One striking piece of
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information
informatia
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information
 to be noticed is that both online
games
 and Console
games
 have roughly 4
billions
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. an equal amount of
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words games, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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