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The line graph below shows the consumption of 3 different types of fast food in Britain from 1970 to 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The line graph below shows the consumption of 3 different types of fast food in Britain from 1970 to 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The line bar illustrates three different
kind
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 of fast food dishes served in Britain between 1970 to 1990 namely
hamburger
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hamburgers
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,
fish
 and
chips
 and pizza.
Overall
 ,
most
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the most
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 striking feature
were
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was
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the popularity of
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 and (
fish
 and
chips
 )
incresed
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increased
during
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over
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20 years ,
While
pizza
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pizza's
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 popularity decreased
at
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during
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 the same period.
To begin
 with , in
year
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the year
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 1970 the consumption of (
fish
 and
chips
) and hamburgers in
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grams
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gram
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grams
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were
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was
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 below
100
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100-gram
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gram
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after
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after
afte
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after
 following 10
year
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years
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 it
grow
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 gradually
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to about
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about
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to about
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 150
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grams
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gram
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grams
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 for
fish
 and
chips
then
 jumped sharply to record
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its
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the
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its
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 highest point
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of 500
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500
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of 500
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grams
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gram
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grams
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 in
year
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the year
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 1990 to be most
faverable
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favourable
 dish in Britain ,
On the other hand
 ,
Hamburger
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Hamburgers
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 continued to
rose
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rise
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 steadily till
year
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the year
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 1985
which
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when
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 sales went up aggressively to hit 300
gram
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grams
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 in
year
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the year
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 1990. For pizza which lost most of
sales
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its sales
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 , it started in
year
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the year
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 1970 by 300
gram
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grams
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then
 dropped by 100
gram
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grams
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 in
year
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the year
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 1985
afterward
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afterwards
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 the sales stayed stable with minimum charges
at the end
 of the period.
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